poems! constructive criticism appreciated

"with justEachOther"

(feeling i could live
alone with just My
lover ((for-all-of-
ever) being-moreThan
fine — Dandy hands
full of fantastic Wife

forgetting anything
whichKeptUs from-Kissing
or lying in the lawn:
.GreenGrass,
talking-about simply
trees(or Everything),

rolling over to her-sameFace
each 8am,gently-kissingLips.
))::openEyes, (she smiles and
my-coveredUp-fingersRun-underneath
sheets — traveling her everyinch;
she gigglesLoudly,flippingOver
her-body, notLooking back
Until i promise to stopThat)

'darlinggg;letMe-seeeYou
pleeease. Your eyes are
where my home is./
, so let me in there'

she just
rollsBackOver
Smiling

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Assignment: (revised since the meeting)
"who needs calculus"

half-asleep i tumble
out-from-under
heavy green sheets

pushing icy wind and
pails of hard hail
past the coffee shop
and the bookstore

more big doors and drawling
hallways before i reach that room,
all interlocking cement blocks
and no wallpaper.

there's never any wallpaper.